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PBParty Entry #46: Hats Off to Penelope {ART}

March 24, 2024 Posted by Mindy Alyse Weiss PBParty Finalists 2024 24 Comments

GENRE: Character Driven, Humor, Fantasy


WORDS: 449


Query:

Dear Agents and Editors,

I’m an author/illustrator, and I’d like to thank you for taking the time to read a sample of my work! This excerpt is from my 449 word picture book manuscript, Hats Off to Penelope, which is written for children ages 4-7. It’s a story about challenging cultural norms and pursuing dreams, like “Loujain Dreams of Sunflowers,” but written with humorous storytelling similar to “Mr Tiger Goes Wild.”

Penelope adores hats…just like everyone else in the land of Poplin. She dreams of working in a fancy shop and sewing hats for the Queen of Poplin herself. There is only one problem. No one believes that a pigeon can make hats! Especially not Madam Petrova, who owns the most elegant hat shop in all of Poplin. No matter how hard Penelope tries, Madam Petrova will not allow her in the shop. So Penelope does what any determined pigeon would do. She gets creative. This adorable story will empower all pigeons (and humans) to challenge the roles they are told they can play in life, and wear the hat that fits them best.

I’m an illustrator from far Northern California. I have a bachelor’s degree in fine arts from Brigham Young University, Idaho. I homeschool my four children, ages 15, 14, 12, and 5, so I get to teach a wide variety of subjects, ranging from high school mathematics and science down to beginning reading. And yes, just like Penelope, I like to make things out of fabric. I’ve sewn everything from hats, to wedding dresses, to up-cycled jean tote bags. I’m an active member of SCBWI. I recently participated in a year-long workshop based on Ann Whiteford Paul’s book “Writing Picture Books,” with a group from my local SCBWI chapter. I’m also a member of two regular critique groups. Other memberships include SVS Learn and Domestika, which I use to continue my art education.

If you enjoy Hats Off to Penelope and want to read more samples of my work, I have other manuscripts available. You can view my online portfolio at https://kirstenmcgonigalart.com. I am active on Instagram as @kirsten.mcgonigal.art where I post process videos of my illustrations, as well as artwork.

Thank you again for your time! I’m looking forward to hearing from you.


Excerpt:

Penelope lived in Poplin, where everyone loved hats.
Penelope loved hats, too. But she didn’t only want to wear them. She wanted to make them!
She spent her days peering into shop windows, longing to join the creative bustle inside.
She dreamed of making hats for the Queen of Poplin herself.
But…
Pigeons were not allowed in hat shops. Even pigeons as posh as Penelope.


What inspired you to write this story & what do you have in common with it:

I wrote Hats Off to Penelope during a time when I was struggling to understand the ramifications that the religious ideals of my childhood have had in my life. This little story was my way of giving voice to something I wish I could have understood much earlier; that it’s ok to follow my heart, even if it takes me away from the cultural ideals of others around me. Penelope’s tenacity in pursuing her dream, and her eventual triumph, reflects my hope for what I’m trying to create in my life as I choose bravery, rather than conformity.


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  • Lindsay Auld
    · Reply

    March 25, 2024 at 5:47 AM

    Hi Kirsten, I’d love to see more of HATS OFF TO PENELOPE and you’re welcome to send the full manuscript and/or dummy to me via email. Please feel free to send along any other manuscripts you’d like to share as well. Thank you!

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    • Kirsten McGonigal
      · Reply

      March 25, 2024 at 3:29 PM

      Thank you Lindsay! I’m putting the finishing touches on the dummy, so look for it in your inbox in a week or two, as well as a couple other manuscripts.

  • Teresa Kietlinski
    · Reply

    March 25, 2024 at 9:37 AM

    Hi Kristen, I would love to see the HATS OFF TO PENELOPE proposal (ms, dummy, samples). Love the illustration samples you have above! –TK

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    • Kirsten McGonigal
      · Reply

      March 25, 2024 at 3:25 PM

      Thank you! I’m putting the finishing touches on the dummy, so look for it in your inbox in a few days. 🙂

  • Lisa Amstutz
    · Reply

    March 25, 2024 at 11:31 AM

    I’d love to see more! Please feel free to query me at QueryManager.com/2006/PBParty.

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    • Kirsten McGonigal
      · Reply

      March 25, 2024 at 3:30 PM

      Thank you! 🙂

  • Adria Goetz
    · Reply

    March 25, 2024 at 12:58 PM

    Ooh I’d love to see this! My QM link is: http://querymanager.com/AdriasTreasureTrove

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    • Kirsten McGonigal
      · Reply

      March 25, 2024 at 3:31 PM

      Thank you! 🙂

  • Sally Kim
    · Reply

    March 26, 2024 at 6:33 PM

    This look and sounds very promising! Please submit the full manuscript/dummy and your portfolio here: https://querymanager.com/query/sallyabla and note “PBParty” in the referral section so I know to prioritize it!

    • Kirsten McGonigal
      · Reply

      March 27, 2024 at 12:12 AM

      Thank you! I’m putting the finishing touches on the dummy, so expect it in your inbox in the next week or so. 🙂

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  • Elizabeth Schleisman
    · Reply

    March 27, 2024 at 2:41 PM

    I would love to read the rest of your book! If you’d like to submit to Beaming Books, please email me at schleismane@beamingbooks.com.

    • Kirsten McGonigal
      · Reply

      March 27, 2024 at 7:54 PM

      Thank you Elizabeth! 🙂

  • Ainslie Campbell-Schwartz
    · Reply

    March 28, 2024 at 4:56 PM

    I would love to see the rest of this, and any other projects and/or your portfolio! Love the art so much.

    • Kirsten
      · Reply

      March 28, 2024 at 10:23 PM

      Thank you! 😊 I’ll be in touch.

  • Jessica Saint Jean
    · Reply

    March 29, 2024 at 1:42 PM

    I’d love to see the full pitch and dummy for this book! If you’d like to query me, email me at jessica@jillgrinbergliterary.com and mention “PB Party request” in the subject line.

    • Kirsten McGonigal
      · Reply

      March 29, 2024 at 8:21 PM

      Thank you! I’ll be in touch soon. 🙂

  • Angelica Busanet
    · Reply

    March 29, 2024 at 4:36 PM

    Hi! An editor request here. This is so funny and the art is absolutely gorgeous. I would love to see the full pitch and dummy of this whenever it’s ready. Thank you!!

    • Kirsten McGonigal
      · Reply

      March 29, 2024 at 8:29 PM

      Thank you so much for your complements and invitation, Angelica! I’m happy dancing. 🙂

  • AGENT Heather Cashman
    · Reply

    March 29, 2024 at 5:52 PM

    This made me burst out laughing! I love it already. I would love to read the full of this as well as a couple other submissions! Please query me if you think we would be a good fit!
    QueryManager.com/HeatherCashman/PBPitchParty

    • Kirsten McGonigal
      · Reply

      March 29, 2024 at 8:11 PM

      Thank you Heather! I’m glad it made you laugh. We need more laughter! 🙂

  • Mara Cobb
    · Reply

    April 2, 2024 at 6:47 PM

    I would love to see the full manuscript! Please submit via the link below if you would like to share (and be sure to mention PBParty!) 🙂 https://QueryManager.com/Mara_Cobb_Query_Link

  • Kirsten McGonigal
    · Reply

    April 3, 2024 at 11:37 AM

    Thank you Mara! 🙂

  • Michelle Jackson
    · Reply

    April 10, 2024 at 10:24 PM

    I love this! Please send it to:
    https://QueryManager.com/LCSLiteraryServices

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    • Kirsten McGonigal
      · Reply

      April 11, 2024 at 2:25 PM

      Thank you Michelle!

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